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Nathraiben
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I suffer vicariously with you... my last forum RPG was like... 5 months ago, and my last fix of PnP I had in October. I dearly regret getting NWN2 right after it came out, long before any (decent) PW had a chance to be done by then 
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IskatuMesk
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| SorceressAshura wrote: | | Thank you guys, I'm real glad you guys feel that way. When I create an area I always have music playing in the background. Without the music for inspiration, I can garuantee they wouldn't of turned out nearly half as good. |
That's pretty much the same for me. I can't even function without music going.
Also, Limewire doesn't have nearly the kind of database I have access to. 
Additionally, if you have some backstory I can work with, I can create you some lore for baddies.
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For clearification, I'll need info on exactly what limits you want your villians to have, the backstory of the world itself, the way "power" works, so on. An example of my writing in one of my novels...
| Quote: | An eternity of silence. An eternity of darkness. This was his curse, his blessing, his fate. A thousand blades, a thousand storms, a thousand meaningness ages. He held not the memory of how it all began, merely a distant recollection of an infinite distance that was the past. A distance he did not dwell upon often. When he gazed in his reflection upon the dimly-pulsating panels that encircled him in his multi-role tactical assault ship, Gal`Sennmus only saw an empty shell staring him back. This was his curse. His blessing. His fate.
He did not know truly why he had the impulses he had. The impulse, the desire, the will to find one soul among a meaningless million. It was so empty to him, the quest he was sent upon, but he served with no less care. His mind barely operated at all – the scarce thoughts that pulsated from its tortured depths were little more than commands to his ship. He was not in a medition, but rather a dead-state. His blackened robe and cowl were no warmer than his soul. With every breath his half-mechanical body let out, the consoles around him dimmed a little more, their energy drawn by his mere presence.
He was far beyond the minds of most of the others, now. A time where he could immerse himself in absolute nothingness. Become a part of the Abyss itself. This was when he was at peace. He was tempted to remain here for an eternity, to embrace the absolute meaning of nothingness. Yet, every time he was forced to answer the call of the blood that flowed through his forsaken veins, it caged him that much more. He loathed the Abyss and all it stood for. He loathed time itself. He knew, though, that he'd never be free of it all, no matter how much he tried.
Sennmus only derived mild pleasure from the souls of others. To his empty mind, they were but a momentary sustenance that, while pleasing for the first while, would eventually run out. He existed not then to serve the desire of those that bound him to his mission, but himself. He was angered now, though. He had foreseen a possible manner in which he might end it all, but it had been snatched from him, right from under his nose. His one hope of nothingness, stolen from him. It was this that brought him to his darkest of minds. It was this that would bring the darkness down upon the world.
Sennmus was not as much a commander, a leader, as he was a simple figure that few unfortunate individuals would never wholly know before their own end came. He relished in the dying moments of others, dreaming of when he might find a creature that can deliver such a fate to himself. The priest was never to find such an individual, cursed by his own power. Thus, he would wander the wastelands of the Abyss, damned to sleepless immortality by the very power that he had willingly become. |
Kind of long, but when I want to start introducing people to characters, I like to be thorough.
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SorceressAshura
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Very nice Iskatu, the character shows weakness and strength. Flaws that make him "human" but not quite. And potential to survive through many readers. Keep that character up, I'd love to see what happens to him.
For the rest of the night I plan to fill out some character introductions in the All Creatures Tavern. Characters that will be npcs in the PW, (NPCs that DMs can control.. *hint hint* ) As well as elaborate more on the actual lore of Rhydin.
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Nathraiben
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| Posted: Sat Jan 06, 2007 6:54 am Post subject: |
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Utter glee - to both of your posts!
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IskatuMesk
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Actually, Gal`Sennmus is not human. He is an immortal demonic priest, created by the essence of an Elder God who was killed during an event called the First Turning. The essence does not have a real sentience, instead a collection of impulses and emotions. The demons, called the Drenahm, spawned from the essence. Sennmus is one of the most distinct and powerful of these demons. By DnD standards, he could completely annihilate the Gods. The very air around him is frozen to the point that matter cannot exist. It simply disintegrates. That is simply from the energy of his soul.
However, all this power and agelessness brings to him an interesting state of mind. He is bound to Guola, which is basically the Devil, and can never really die. He seeks out a power that can bring his wretched soul to true destruction, to be free of the endless agony that is existence.
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I never said he was racially human, just that he had flaws that identified him with humanity. As far as being a god destoryer, and all that.. is fine.. but the problem with a character like that is nothing will phase the reader if hes quote, " most distinct and powerful of these demons" That just lines him up with all the other demons, others have created with a similar story. The flaws, and weaknesses is what defines a memorable character. But thats just my first glance at the character, so I'll wait until I get the full story before I speak
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Moved your post to the All Creatures Tavern, it belongs there more so then here. Let me know what exactly you want the topic subject to be so I can change it to suit your writting. 
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IskatuMesk
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Well, Throne of Armageddon is one of my novels, so something pertaining to that would be best.
I also do appreciate comments on my writing. It helps give motivation where there is none.
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Nathraiben
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Wait, "utter glee" doesn't qualify as comments on your writing?  
Well, okay... I'll try my best to put it into more concrete terms:
I just love a series of ellipses at the beginning of a text, so I was quite delighted when you used that very stilistic device. For me it's a sure bet to get me hooked up with a text!
Same for using systrophes and repetitios/anaphers, they give the story an epic feeling long before the reader gets to KNOW that this is about an epic being.
Lots of epitheton ornans as well, and while their significance for non-trivial texts might be arguable, I think they make for great stilistic devices to built up the desired atmosphere in fantasy stories.
Another chalk up one for the story is the linguistic variation - taking full advantage of a diverse vocabulary. The repetitios are the only parts of the text where it gets repetitious, so there's no risk of getting bored at the grammatical aspects of the story.
There's nothing much to say about the "story" of course, just that it makes you curious and awakens the desire to read on about this mysterious being.
(Better? Or should I rather go back to a simple "utter glee"? )
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Actually I understood that quite well.
I was more or less referring to the larger post that was moved to the other section, too.
Additionally, repetition is something I've been working on squashing. It's pretty hard when you're looking at a ~1200 page book.
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